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Old 09.06.2018, 06:32 AM   #5238
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^ tw2113, he ain't lying

I'd drop the exclamation points. Use maybe two in your entire life's output.

Promising stuff. I'd highly recommend joining a writer's group or possibly take a class or two to eliminate a few of the glaring amateur mistakes I spotted. (Not a slam. It happens. "Becoming a good writer" is, obviously, a process.)
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