Some gay Poem.

static-harmony · 12.08.2006, 12:39 AM

Beyond my time I will lose this hair,
Grow old, fat, and ugly,
I will look at my life with utter disappointment,
And the beers I’ve downed in my life will form bleach spots on my belly,
And nothing is blaring from the telly,
All the sins will be laid out evenly on my bed,
Cracks will mar my face,
Photo after photo I will become metal,
Remembrance will be lost in dementia,
Schizoid shadows will lurk in the pool of my eye,
Underground tunnels will part to readmit their love-Lorne king,
Teenage whores will bring out the youth in me,
And my semen will die with me on an old oak tree made of tin,
And guns will explode on a narrow view of life,
And at four in the morning my life will take off,
Into different tattered patterns of a so-called life.

ni'k · 12.08.2006, 12:44 AM

gmku · 12.08.2006, 12:45 AM

Some great lines and images. I'd maybe expand on the "teenage whores" analogy a little. That part interests me.

gmku · 12.08.2006, 12:48 AM

Is that the name of your poem, "Some Gay Poem"? Catchy. So is this a gay man who's dying of AIDS. Is that the point about "gay". I think I get it now. It's not really about a night in a whore house, then?

static-harmony · 12.08.2006, 12:48 AM

I will rework this later on, I am leaving and this was just written down, so I did not organize it that well.

static-harmony · 12.08.2006, 12:49 AM

No I just wanted to catch people's attention.sorry to dissapoint you but no whore story.

gmku · 12.08.2006, 12:50 AM

Oh. "Gay" catches people's attention? Like, the attention of other gay people, you're saying? You're writing this for a homosexual audience?

ni'k · 12.08.2006, 12:51 AM

i creamed all my panties simulataesnously with my 23 bo-jingles.

static-harmony · 12.08.2006, 12:51 AM

No just use the word gay somewhere and people turn.

gmku · 12.08.2006, 12:51 AM

23. Wow. Impressive.

gmku · 12.08.2006, 12:52 AM

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Originally Posted by static-harmony

No just use the word gay somewhere and people turn.

Sure they do. To see the idiot who's dumb enough to use it that way.

static-harmony · 12.08.2006, 12:53 AM

Yes, man I wish the world was not runned by idiots.

gmku · 12.08.2006, 12:54 AM

Then don't use the word gay to mean something derogatory.

king_buzzo · 12.08.2006, 04:26 AM

luxinterior · 12.08.2006, 04:45 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by gmku

Some great lines and images. I'd maybe expand on the "teenage whores" analogy a little. That part interests me.

It would.

king_buzzo · 12.08.2006, 04:47 AM

poems are gay

cryptowonderdruginvogue · 12.08.2006, 04:48 AM

king_buzzo · 12.08.2006, 05:06 AM

king_buzzo · 12.08.2006, 05:07 AM

ou must spread so e repoutrarion aroub

12.08.2006, 12:39 AM	#1
static-harmony invito al cielo Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: outside L.A Posts: 5,156	Beyond my time I will lose this hair, Grow old, fat, and ugly, I will look at my life with utter disappointment, And the beers I’ve downed in my life will form bleach spots on my belly, And nothing is blaring from the telly, All the sins will be laid out evenly on my bed, Cracks will mar my face, Photo after photo I will become metal, Remembrance will be lost in dementia, Schizoid shadows will lurk in the pool of my eye, Underground tunnels will part to readmit their love-Lorne king, Teenage whores will bring out the youth in me, And my semen will die with me on an old oak tree made of tin, And guns will explode on a narrow view of life, And at four in the morning my life will take off, Into different tattered patterns of a so-called life. __________________
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ni'k invito al cielo Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 3,360	hot
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gmku invito al cielo Join Date: May 2006 Location: Oxford, England Posts: 15,225	Some great lines and images. I'd maybe expand on the "teenage whores" analogy a little. That part interests me. __________________ Ever notice how this place just basically, well, sucks.
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12.08.2006, 12:48 AM	#4
gmku invito al cielo Join Date: May 2006 Location: Oxford, England Posts: 15,225	Is that the name of your poem, "Some Gay Poem"? Catchy. So is this a gay man who's dying of AIDS. Is that the point about "gay". I think I get it now. It's not really about a night in a whore house, then? __________________ Ever notice how this place just basically, well, sucks.
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static-harmony invito al cielo Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: outside L.A Posts: 5,156	I will rework this later on, I am leaving and this was just written down, so I did not organize it that well. __________________
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12.08.2006, 12:49 AM	#6
static-harmony invito al cielo Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: outside L.A Posts: 5,156	No I just wanted to catch people's attention.sorry to dissapoint you but no whore story. __________________
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12.08.2006, 12:50 AM	#7
gmku invito al cielo Join Date: May 2006 Location: Oxford, England Posts: 15,225	Oh. "Gay" catches people's attention? Like, the attention of other gay people, you're saying? You're writing this for a homosexual audience? __________________ Ever notice how this place just basically, well, sucks.
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ni'k invito al cielo Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 3,360	i creamed all my panties simulataesnously with my 23 bo-jingles.
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gmku invito al cielo Join Date: May 2006 Location: Oxford, England Posts: 15,225	23. Wow. Impressive. __________________ Ever notice how this place just basically, well, sucks.
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static-harmony invito al cielo Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: outside L.A Posts: 5,156	Yes, man I wish the world was not runned by idiots. __________________
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gmku invito al cielo Join Date: May 2006 Location: Oxford, England Posts: 15,225	Then don't use the word gay to mean something derogatory. __________________ Ever notice how this place just basically, well, sucks.
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king_buzzo invito al cielo Join Date: May 2006 Posts: 11,110	ou must spread so e repoutrarion aroub
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