07.25.2008, 04:46 PM | #1 |
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My Dad had me come in to his antique shop to fix his laptop today and I've found some priceless gems written by my little brother (he does his schoolwork on this computer apparently)
here's one of them, simply entitled Love Poem I yearn to follow the path of your love For I am not worthy of such greatness I mean it when I say you are my dove I shall not cross your path for I am less My day is not complete until the night For that is when I see your lovely face I know thhis will end in an awful fight I mean it when I say tie me in lace But I know you yearn for my presence I know that if I left your sight you'd cry You cross the street to feed the darling pheasants If I was far, through the air you would fly It is not only my riches you want It is not my Olympian physique But its a certain chemistry that daunts It is so strong it will never go weak I like how he says "my olympian physique" (he's super into bodybuilding and reads men's fitness and lives off protein powder and shit- yes this is my same little brother who used to be a little stoner.) |
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07.25.2008, 04:49 PM | #2 |
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oh i see. your "little brother's" poetry eh
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07.25.2008, 04:51 PM | #3 |
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There are a million things that I'd rather be bound in than lace.
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07.25.2008, 04:52 PM | #4 |
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better than Lil Wayne!
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07.25.2008, 04:52 PM | #5 |
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How do you think your little brother would feel knowing you're making fun of his poety on the Internet? And you want to teach kids?
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07.25.2008, 04:57 PM | #6 |
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you are a complete and utter fucking idiot for posting it
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07.25.2008, 04:58 PM | #7 |
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California, do not give this cruel man a teaching job.
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07.25.2008, 04:59 PM | #8 |
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god, I'm glad I shredded all my middle school poetry
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07.25.2008, 05:00 PM | #9 |
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Riches? Olympian physique? Your brother writes like an eloquent 50 Cent.
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07.25.2008, 05:00 PM | #10 |
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pbradley: Why, do you have a mean older brother who'd post it on the net and make fun of you for it?
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07.25.2008, 05:05 PM | #11 |
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No, because the idea of anyone reading it at all makes me cringe. And I know where my old brothers melancholy poetry is so he wouldn't dare.
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07.25.2008, 05:40 PM | #12 |
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Usually the things I write are things I sing. So there's nothing to hide with my work.
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07.25.2008, 06:58 PM | #13 |
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i rip up all my old writings, i probably shouldn't...
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